Saturday, February 2, 2013

Chastity - A Timberwolf's Dove by Alicia

A Timberwolf's Dove


Sometimes in the winter snows a pale snow rabbit dashes across the terrace. Its timberwolf fur, dusted with frozen icing, brushes the snowman's bodice before he disappears into the bushes. Emilia will sit in the window of her home with a hot mug of chocolate, feet tucked in woollen socks, and wait for him to come back. 

On winter nights, the moon frolics on her neighbour's roof, but the stars flicker reproachfully, distant and unyielding. Emilia clutches the thick novel, balancing a glass of mellifluous milk. Her mother is upstairs, rearranging the photo frames and touching the languid curtains. Reminiscent. 

When the spring returns, Emilia finds it difficult not to notice the silver band, singing. It is a long forgiven promise, not forgotten. The grass is simple smaragdine. But the sky is albicant with a flourish of pheasant and pigeon...where are the doves? One of the last sits in the window of her house with a Wordsworth. Emilia has a promise to a lionhearted timberwolf rabbit.

Sometimes in the spring which follows winter, Emilia will see the pale snow rabbit, alone. He is waiting.

Winter is coming, his ears say, before he dashes across the terrace.

I promise, her silver band heralds to the approaching summer. They warn of the endless colour that will flower. They warn Emilia. To stay inside. Summer is for those who go unescorted, for those who do not make promises that cannot be broken. Many times in the summer heat, Emilia will sit on the lawn, and watch the pedestrians parading by; hand in hand, ear to shoulder and heart to heart. She will sit aside and wait for the rabbit, because surviving winter is what matters, until her everlasting summer arrives.

Always, the autumn will tease. The trees shed their layers to shame the name of winter. All the animals hurry away, but not Emilia. She is waiting.

One snowfall winter a pale snow rabbit stops on her terrace. He is a much faded charcoal grey. His ears twitch to say, I have come. 

Emilia is a white dove, the silver band sings.

'Let me lead you into summer, my white dove.'

'I am your white dove.'



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Author's Notes: 364 words! :) And I just realised that "lionhearted timberwolf rabbit" sounds like a mash of three animals haha. A few definitions:
  • Timberwolf, smaragdine and albicant are all colours; a pale grey, emerald green and white, respectively
  • Mellifluous (which I just learnt whilst writing this) means smooth, sweet ...mellifluous milk...?

8 comments:

  1. Haha that was funny I was going to post a comment but subconsciously pressed the pencil and it took me to the editing page and I was like D: no what have I done!! All good.

    Your story is amazing!!! I love the many shades of meaning that you put in there and the resulting calm tinged with ... anxiety?

    I really love your descriptions too (as usual) and how you are able to give everything some life such as in 'the moon frolics', which becomes ever so distinct against the serene winter backdrop.

    However I got a little confused at the end of your story - could you briefly explain what happens?

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  2. I had the same problem - running out of time - except I just kind of went with it instead of changing the ending haha. Originally the rabbit was just going to be part of the imagery. But I did a tiny bit of Googling before I started writing the story, and I found something that mentioned promise rings, so the 'silver band' is supposed to be a promise ring, and Emilia is promised to the rabbit who is metaphorically someone... I know it's confusing.

    If you think about it one way, it seems like the rabbit is tainted because he's grey and she's white, but that just happened because I wrote the first two lines before I thought about all that deep metaphor.

    So, winter is also symbolising how Em has to wait and be chaste, whilst summer, the pigeons and pheasants aren't as pure, or they aren't 'promised'. I even went and made autumn sound promiscuous. :/ This makes it sound like I'm commenting on contemporary society.

    Long story short...

    The ending is when the rabbit comes to marry her I guess.

    I think I tried to make it really deep, but if you try to unravel it, it's actually got a million holes and issues in it, so I'd rather not look into it. I've probably got all the symbolism backwards.

    Now I will go back to your story and make a more analytic comment :) because my first was just me being blown away and unsure how to respond!

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  3. Originally, I wasn't going to comment because...nothing compares to writing my Frankenstein focal paragraph! That I haven't started, by the way. But I'm sure you knew that.

    Okay, Alicia your story. I love the title. So deep and metaphorical. I can see the symbolism of chastity with the dove, white snow and the innocence of Emilia with her hot chocolate and glass of milk.

    But...the story is quite confusing, especially the last few lines. If you hadn't explained the ending, I would have still thought the silver band was some sort of weird metaphorical bird. I don't think the 'long forgiven promise' really hones in the description of marriage. However, I do get the lovers' part 'hand in hand, ear to shoulder, tongue in mouth' (I swear, I wrote exactly the same thing in my Belonging creative as well) that Emilia was possibly waiting for someone.

    In all, lovely story with a good use of imagery and grasp of the concept. But ideas need to be developed and conveyed across clearer.

    Did I mention that I love the title?
    :D
    It's so...Alicia.

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    1. Yes!!! I loved the title too. It's so alicia-ey and that's synonymous with awesome, fantasticy.

      Which is why I died a little when I accidentally saw her title before I wrote my story ...

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    2. The title doesn't even make sense! It just means 'a grey's dove'. And grey can't be in possession. D:

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  4. I know this just proves how incredibly slow I am ... but even after reading you and Maggie's comment like 2945693487 times, I only just realised a reason why I probably didn't get the ending.

    I always thought the silver band was ... a band. I thought it was like a metaphorical orchestra which sung the voice of the seasons ... I even reread it and realised that there's nothing to really disprove my interpretation haha :P

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    1. NO JENNIFER! YOU FOUND EXACTLY WHAT I WAS AIMING FOR! :D It was one of those intentional ambiguous things I like to do for the sake of confusing people (which I know isn't good but I'm glad you picked up on the alternate side that I was portraying!). :D

      (the deleted comment is just this, i just decided to put it under reply)

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